Print draft feedback and learner response

 Estimated current grade for print work: D

Comments and feedback:

  • The image on the cover is great – but is it a cover image? It makes it quite difficult to see the rest of the conventions on the cover.
  • Typography use is generally very strong on the cover but make sure it’s consistent. That’s part of meeting the ‘house style’ element of the brief.
  • Check the brief minimum requirements and make sure you tick everything in terms of cover lines etc.
  • The two additional images can work but this feels like a draft rather than final version with the white background etc. Perhaps think about placement too?
  • Is your slogan too long? You generally want them to be snappy. Could possibly consider the same for the main flash / main cover line.
  • The double page spread has some conventions used effectively and some missing. Again, go back to the brief and work through what needs to be there. I would read over the introductory text again as it could be smoother in places.
  • The Q&A format works well but you need to make sure it is consistent throughout the interview. Have a look at a couple of examples of this – there are several approaches you can take here.
  • The idea of the images is good – a series of images of the two interviewees. But these images with the whiteboard in the background don’t feel professional. Can you edit or re-shoot?
  • The final page ‘Get to know Money Motivated’ is excellent in terms of text/content but in terms of design doesn’t meet the brief – ‘consistent house style throughout’. Consider alternative ways you could present both this and the double page spread as there is an excellent feature in here with a bit of editing. E.g. could the final page become a sidebar instead?


things that will do to improve 
- change the cover image 
-make it all one house style 
-make the slogan shorter and sharper 
-diagonal bar at the bottom where the cover pictures are with the cover lines 
- add cover lines 

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